Write a formal academic argument using Moore and Gibbons Watchmen as an exhibit source and Scott McClouds Understanding Comics as a theory and/or method source in your analysis

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Write a formal academic argument using Moore and Gibbons Watchmen as an exhibit source and Scott McClouds Understanding Comics as a theory and/or method source in your analysis
9/24/2018 9″11 PM:

These are my teacher’s comment please rewrite the essay due to his comments

This draft is not an argumentative essay, in that it lacks a thesis and meanders from one very vague thought to another. It also fails to be a lens essay because you barely touch on McCloud’s theories and tools, and when you do (such as in the case of icons)
Finally, I can see by the end of the essay that you are also folding in a third source — McCloud’s Making Comics — that you do not need at all to complete this essay.
you cannot explain them clearly or apply them correctly to the exhibit source, “Watchmen.”

09/24/2018 21:17 PM: It includes my teacher’s recommendation and the directions. Please follow the instructions carefully.

09/26/2018 21:46 PM: I
This draft is not an argumentative essay, in that it lacks a thesis and meanders from one very vague thought to another. It also fails to be a lens essay because you barely touch on McCloud’s theories and tools, and when you do (such as in the case of icons), you cannot explain them clearly or apply them correctly to the exhibit source, “Watchmen.”

Finally, I can see by the end of the essay that you are also folding in a third source — McCloud’s Making Comics — that you do not need at all to complete this essay.

My advice is to start over. Reread the books so that you understand them fully, and approach the project in a simpler way: pick one element, trace the pattern that emerges when that element is used throughout the text, and build your argument about what it means from the evidence you have at hand.
This is my teacher’s comment

can you rewrite the paper again according to these comments